A Mistake in Each Sentence

Need to write gross sales emails like a professional?

Kristina and Will take a look at frequent electronic mail errors (utilizing actual examples) and rewrite them with the intention to study what to do otherwise.

Be a part of Kristina Finseth (Sr. Supervisor, Outbound Progress Advertising and marketing at Greenhouse) and Will Allred (Co-Founder & COO at Lavender) to get TWO views and TWO approaches on actual gross sales emails, each week on Gross sales Hacker.

Watch the re-write, and take a look at the earlier than and after emails under! 👇

Topic: Will, Can we join to debate partnership alternatives?

Hello Will, Greetings!

I got here throughout your LinkedIn profile – favored how passionate you’ve been with work and it’s nice to see you main your organization to newer heights.

I’m from, XXXXX XXXXX a 350+ member, Licensed associate with a number of World IT distributors PEGA, Microsoft, Oracle, TOSCA, Google. Now we have facilities of excellence in Cloud, Customized Software program Growth, DevOps, PEGA, SaaS, AI, Information warehousing, Information Analytics, BI, and Testing. We’d be completely happy to be a seamless extension of your workforce.

Can I schedule a fast name as we speak or tomorrow to elucidate extra about it? Eagerly wanting ahead to listening to from you.

Thanks & Finest Regards,
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Will’s Take

Topic: Lavender Dimension: Are you outsourcing?

Hey Will,

I got here throughout Lavender from our work serving to groups in healthcare & insurance coverage with gross sales automation. Can’t lie… I used to be a bit stunned.

Given the standard of your extension, I assumed your workforce could be a lot bigger.

Is the workforce outsourcing a few of that work as we speak? If not, we will help offload some initiatives that may bottleneck your progress.

Comply with up with a considerate bump:

Hey Will,

Given your workforce dimension, I’d be stunned to listen to you hadn’t thought-about outsourcing dev. Did you have got any suggestions on my notice under?

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